Thanks. After a long hiatus on my stories I was worried that one would come off too awkward
You mean this new update?
https://www.fanficti...0412&chapter=5/
Sorry for being a couple of days late on my review.
Anyway, for such a short story there is a lot here; I love stories like this were cold hardware becomes more feeling and ethical than its flesh and blood masters. While myself, the reader, had to make sure I didn't just scan over the first 2/3 to 3/4 of the story due to it superficially seeming like unimportant robot babel. I was glad that I went over it a couple of times to catch all of the nuances of the Swatbot's dialogue, which was quite good. In the end it left me wanting to read more, which in my opinion is a good thing: leaving the reader wanting more.
Good job!
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Started by TheRedStranger, Sep 04 2013 06:01 PM
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Posted 07 January 2014 - 03:28 PM
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Posted 07 January 2014 - 11:17 PM
Home stretch (I keep telling myself that. One of these days it has to be true, right?). Wound up going into a bit more detail than anticipated on the latest section, but the extra focus helps it feel like a sort of climax for the chapter, which isn't something I had originally intended but seems to work well. Hopefully just another day or two's worth of writing to go.
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Posted 07 January 2014 - 11:33 PM
Just be careful on the amount of text. A wall of text on screen chases readers away. Make sure you space it enough so it doesn't appear to be a wall of text.
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Posted 08 January 2014 - 12:38 AM
As long as I can paste from Word with formatting, I'll be good to go. If not...well, I get to spend an hour or two doing nothing but hitting Enter.
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Posted 08 January 2014 - 12:47 AM
Deviant Art doesn't keep formatting.
Fan Fiction does a bit better, but still doesn't. Though you have the option to add lines between paragraphs which helps sometimes.
If you're just posting it on the Forums....it still doesn't keep the formatting very well.
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Posted 09 January 2014 - 06:02 PM
I'm looking for some extra opinions on some of the rough draft episodes of EoT that are in RP script formatting. If anybody would care too see some sneak previews and give opinions, I'd really appreciate it.
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Posted 01 February 2014 - 08:07 PM
I wanted a status update from you guys, before I gave mine. I've been hard at work with various things, including some reviews and a Newsletter.
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Posted 01 February 2014 - 11:12 PM
Fallen behind in some of my other projects so I was working on them.
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Posted 06 February 2014 - 09:40 PM
I wanted a status update from you
Hahahahahahahahaha....hahaha....haha...ha
*Cries in a corner*
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Posted 07 February 2014 - 07:21 AM
College work interfering...
Some say that he knows 2 facts about ducks, and both of them are wrong. And that 61 years ago he accidentally introduced Her Majesty The Queen to a Greek racialist. All we know is, I'm going to the tower now to have my head cut off, and he is called The Stig.
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Posted 07 March 2014 - 05:40 PM
For this week's Unsung Spotlight:
BRMSORT'S SEASON 3 -- REDUX:
https://sites.google...ght-new-morning
This deserves more attention and a possible review. If you find the time, make the time.
Also plan to get back into reviewing when I settle into my new home. So if you want it, ask for it.
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Posted 07 March 2014 - 06:48 PM
Spring break is upon me.
Will that chapter actually be finished? Will the beginning of my magnum opus ever see the light of day? Will it leave all who gaze upon its genius in silent awe? Will it be rightfully scorned as an incomprehensible amalgam of pretentious prose and aimless drivel? Or is it all a fabrication, nothing but a lie I conjured up months ago in the hopes of infiltrating the coalition and ousting Stranger from his position of political authority?
Stay tuned to find out! Same FUS time, same FUS channel!
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Posted 07 March 2014 - 10:53 PM
Spring break is upon me.
Will that chapter actually be finished? Will the beginning of my magnum opus ever see the light of day? Will it leave all who gaze upon its genius in silent awe? Will it be rightfully scorned as an incomprehensible amalgam of pretentious prose and aimless drivel? Or is it all a fabrication, nothing but a lie I conjured up months ago in the hopes of infiltrating the coalition and ousting Stranger from his position of political authority?
Stay tuned to find out! Same FUS time, same FUS channel!
Et tu, Sorzo? 
If I mysteriously die Red gets my all my supposed "authority." Seniority rules.
I hope it all goes well...
Meanwhile I have over two novels worth rough-draft on EoT. ;P
Problem is that I've been writing backwards from Book Two: Volume One, to the "season finale" of Book One."
I might actually get some help from one you guys to get me back on track for Episode One-Two.
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Posted 07 March 2014 - 10:57 PM
Admin powers. I am the supreme authority in this topic punks! 
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Posted 07 March 2014 - 11:11 PM
Actually started tonight and am getting to finally try my hand at giving Sonic some banter against SWATbots. Gosh, this is fun, though I might wind up giving this final stretch a bit of a faster pace than intended. We'll see.
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Posted 09 March 2014 - 01:25 PM
Finally.
http://sonicsatam.co...843#entry190905
As promised, I'll start reviewing the various stories of other coalition members. Stranger asked me to look at his first, so I'll be starting Edge of Tomorrow tonight.
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Posted 09 March 2014 - 07:53 PM
New's Updates:
Sorzo's work is now on the primary post!
New Reviews Coming Soon.
Two New FCC-related Threads Coming Soon.
Sorzo has leveled up to a Published Member. This means he gains more accountability, publicity, and request-power in the group. Go meritocracy!
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Posted 09 March 2014 - 08:00 PM
Sorzo Gains 1000 XP!
*Spends skill points in Imagery, Metaphors, and Bad Puns*
Joking aside, you filed my story under the wrong category. The Princess and the Demon isn't a short story; when the whole thing's finished, it will be the length of a small novel (I'm estimating at least 60,000 words). On top of that, it will be continued by subsequent stories of similar length. This is all assuming everything goes according to plan, but I feel it should go under the Series/Serials category.
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Posted 09 March 2014 - 08:09 PM
Sorzo Gains 1000 XP!
*Spends skill points in Imagery, Metaphors, and Bad Puns*
Joking aside, you filed my story under the wrong category. The Princess and the Demon isn't a short story; when the whole thing's finished, it will be the length of a small novel (I'm estimating at least 60,000 words). On top of that, it will be continued by subsequent stories of similar length. This is all assuming everything goes according to plan, but I feel it should go under the Series/Serials category.
Thought that would get your attention. 
Well, I wanted to see if you were that confident...I was planning to upgrade it's status when the time came. But if you are truly that ardent about seeing this through. Then I shall.
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Posted 09 March 2014 - 08:10 PM
You also need to put the story name in italics.
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