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[TheRedStranger]

Two updates! More writing and...

 

http://theredstrange...otnik-400346173

[TheRedStranger]

 

Two updates! More writing and...

 

http://theredstrange...otnik-400346173

 

You gotta love seeing Robuttnik puffin on a stogie! Tails looks... intense.

 

 

"It's a new pair of lungs...and I need to break them in."

 

 

That's not really Tails... that's a bad guy called The Simulicrum (based off the crappy but popular Tail's Doll creepy pasta). I took the crappy urban legend and made a really creepy bad guy out of it. I can tell you more about him via PM.

 

Tails is going to be cute still, but he's going to have more vulpine edge in this. He is growing up after all. He's going to look a bit more animal-like, especially in fights.

[TheRedStranger]

For Halloween-Month you guys get a treat not a trick.    The Deviant Art Guys probably have already seen this, but I thought you might like to as well. 

 

http://theredstrange...-Doll-372707506

[TheRedStranger]

 Big update coming soon. 

 

 Check out the RPG in the meantime. http://sonicsatam.co...938#entry183059

[TheRedStranger]

Giving this one an hour early for you guys.  

 

 You gotta tell me what you guys think.

 

https://soundcloud.c...dsynth-i-rabbot

[RedAuthar]

Giving this one an hour early for you guys.

 

 You gotta tell me what you guys think.

 

https://soundcloud.c...dsynth-i-rabbot

Maybe it's just me, but I feel the song comes of more dark and depressing sounding than Bunnie's Character.  It's not bad, I just wouldn't put it to Bunnie....actually I think I'd put it to a Bomberman Stage. 

[TheRedStranger]

 

Giving this one an hour early for you guys.

 

 You gotta tell me what you guys think.

 

https://soundcloud.c...dsynth-i-rabbot

Maybe it's just me, but I feel the song comes of more dark and depressing sounding than Bunnie's Character.  It's not bad, I just wouldn't put it to Bunnie....actually I think I'd put it to a Bomberman Stage. 

 

 

Trust me it fits in context. Listen around 3:16 and 4:15. That's all major key. Also Bunnie's character is optimistic but she was indeed half-Roboticized and has to go through a lot. In EoT you are going to learn a lot about Bunnie's backstory that will surprise you.  This also plays when she's fighting, so it has to be intense (hence why there is a hint of Robotropolis's new theme in the begining. The happy music is being saved for later. When she gets her a man. 

[Mike Arcade]

Bunnie's theme ROCKS man! \m/

 

Very nice Stranger.

[TheRedStranger]

 

Bunnie's theme ROCKS man! \m/

 

Very nice Stranger.

 

 

Hope to do more. 

[TheRedStranger]

Do you believe that all the ethnicity of Mobians were once seperated? Is Mobitroplis just the main hub? What about other nations?

[TheRedStranger]

HAPPY HALLOWEEN!  [Or rather All Saints Day].

 

You get a treat, no tricks... A rough draft preview of a future episode. This is for you Sonsal fans.

 

During a scene in an upcoming Episode (4?): Underground, at an important banquet in Casino Zone.]

 

Sonic: "What are you doing, Sal? What're you drink-"

 

 Sally: *Bumps glass into Sonic's snout* "It's... *Looks through glass* it's blue. *Looks Sonic up and down*  I like blue...it makes me feel good. You should try some."

 

Sonic *grabs glass, sniffs, then frowns*: "I don't think you realize this is..." 

 

 Sally: "Blue? Oh, sure I know it's blue, Sonic." *Stumbles* "I can plainly see it's blue." *She grabs the glass and attempts to sip, spilling it over her shoulder* *A bustling Overlander butler walks by and slips in it, Sally being completely and blissfully unaware with a flirty leer.* "Don't argue with me - I'm the one with all the brain after alls. *Taps her forehead with the empty wine glass* I'm right your wrong, as usually."

 

Sonic *Grabbing Sally and finding a private room*: "Oh man...this is mondo bad. Way passed uncool."

 

Sally: *Tugging away and reaching for the wine bottle knocking over a plate of oysters before yanking it* "You're way passed uncools. Sonic the Hedgedrag." *Hiccups a laugh*.

 Sonic: "Sally this" *grabs bottle and sniffs and places it atop a piano.* "is a bit out of your age range"

 

Sally: *Noticing they are alone* "You're not..."

 

 Sonic: "Sal, just so you know: we are on a diplomatic mission and an espionage mission at the same time. If we draw any suspicion to ourselves..."

 

Sally: "Screw 'em. Whatter those bald-skins gonna do, chomp us with their l'il flat teeth? Sticks a finger in her mouth showing off her own set of incisors* Take away our birthdays? Talk to us sternly? We always find a way, it's the Freedom Fighter way!" *Swigs the bottle and slams it down on the piano*

 

Sonic: "Geez, that must be some strong stuff...you've gone nuts Sally Acorn ."

 

Sally: *Leans forward slipping hands into his tuxedo* "I'd like to gone nuts your acorn Sonic. T. Hedgehog..."

 

Sonic (carefully pushing Sally away): I have no idea what you just said. And frankly I don't wanna know what you meant."

 Sally: "Oh don't be like that...You were right about clothes. There! I admit it! See! *Begins scratching her arms* "They're tchy. Let's take 'em off."

 

Sonic: "Oh geez, e-even the boots?"

 

Sally: "Yep..." *Grabs his tie as she flings off a boot hidden under her dress.* "I know it's a first, huh? *Flicks of the other* "I'm in a good mood now, who knows what could happen?" *Trips and almost crashes back into a vase.*

 

 Sonic (*rushing to catch her*): "Hold on Sal!" *Grabs her*

 

Sally: "I think I just fell for you" *Grins, raking him into her deliberate trap **Grips tight and leans into to his ear and whispers* “And you fell for it."

 

Sonic: "Well... maybe just a quick kiss...No!" *Slaps himself* "You are out of your mind Sal! I'm not going to take advantage of your "great mood." Besides, I gotta mission to do. People are counting on me - us."

 

Sally: "For once...*Open's his top shirt button*I think the mission should wait." *Pushes him against the piano.*

[Outside in the banquet hall]

 Antoine: "C'etat quoi ça?" *Hears piano banging. Ears twitch up as he hears a muffled cry of 

Sally. *

 

Antoine *sword drawn* "Hold on my princess!"  *Storms in to find Sally pinning a squirming Sonic to the ground, ripping off Sonic's sneaker, glove bit tight in her mouth*

 

Antoine: Oh mon...

 

 Sally: "Come on and stop squirming!" *Rips off the other glove with her teeth*.

 

Sonic: "Thank God. Antoine! I'm saved." *Fidgets out of her grip and stands up.*

 

Antoine:"Sonique! What in the name of santity our you doing to our Princess. And at a crucible time like this!"

 

Sonic: "What am I doing?" *Points defiantly to his now bare chest-fur.*

 

Antoine (sheathing his sword with a frown): "I've expect a lot from you Sonique, but not this...I refuse to believe that zhe princess of nobel Acorn itself would..."

 

Sally (sighing on the floor, head rested on Sonic's feet): "Believe it Antoine." *Grabs his pant leg* "I gotta a itch only Sonic Hedgehog can scratch. *Tugs*

 

Sonic (*Pants fall to his knees*): "For once, I'm glad I'm wearing underpants..." *Sally giggles*

 

Sally: "Ahw...I'm not." *Hiccups*.

 

Antoine: "What has happened to her? What did you do?"

 

 Sonic: "I didn't do anything..." *Hikes his dress pants up defensively, and fastens his belt. He corks the bottle and tosses it to Antoine.* "This happened to her. She's been actin' crazy ever since she had a single swig."

 

Antoine: * Antoine catches it and stares at intently.* "Overland Azure. Ah, and a fine year too. It was only legal in zhe Overland and the Dhawmhan Provance before and after zhe Great War." *Uncorks and drags in the smell with a pleased smile.*

 

Sally: "I want that back when you're finished, Antoine." "And scrounge me up a few bottles from the banquet hall while you're at it..." *Starts to twirl Sonic's glove before whipping his back end with it. Sonic gives a little jump.*

 

Antoine (*ears quiver and brow raises*): "Wait..." *Sniff in deeply* “Zhe bouquet she’s…odd. *Snifs again, deeply* Oh non, ah merde… Zhis has been poisoned.  *Sniffs once more and twists the cork back* Sonique, I believe our Princess…”

 

Sonic: “Drugged, yeah,  I gathered.”

 

*Sally rolls across the carpeted floor, sighing.* “Drugged? Oh no….I feel fine.”

 

Antoine: “With a derivative of ocotea cymbarum…alchemically processed of course”

 

Sally (continued): *Hiccups* “Can’t afford to be anyways, I gotta…”

 

Sonic: “Octagon cimbalom?” *Buttons his shirt back, and straightens his tie.*

 

Antoine: “It is an evergreen plant native of your Green Hill…”

 

Sonic: “How do you –“

 

Sally (continued): *Rolls back atop Sonic’s feet, grasping his legs, nuzzling his knee.* “Well that can wait…you're more important, Nikky.”

 

Antoine: “I’ve pick up some new tricks while you were on hiatus, alchimie an’ botany mostly. When I stumbled on Octea zhe first time for a supposed meal…well… *Scratches snout and straightens uniform.* “It causes extreme euphoria and is an – how do you say? – aphrodisiaque ?

 

Sonic: “Oh…” *Ears droop* “I don’t need to know Parisian to know what that means.  And what happened to you? How long did it last?”

 

Sally:  “I waited three years…they can wait three minutes…no, will need longer than that.” *Smacks forehead with palm. Even you aren’t that fast.” *Lays her head back* “Boy, you are so blue...”

 

Antoine (looking embarrassed) “Let’s just say I woke up with, um, in an embarrassing position, and leave it at that. I’m glad I was alone.”

 

Sally: “Oh me, oh my…” *Stares happily at her hands and feet, rolling her fingers and toes back and forth.* “And I thought I was the only one here who…w-what are we talking about again? I have not a clue.”

 

Sonic: “Never mind I don’t wanna know about your new hobbies…” *Finds his shoe.*

 

Sally: “If I’m drugged. What are we going to do about the…”

 

 Antoine and Sonic (simultaneously):  “ The Diplomacy Speech!”

 

Antoine: “Bon sang! Qu'allons nous allons faire?”

 

Sonic: “Well, for one we can’t let you do it.”

 

Antoine: “I’d be having you know I’m…

 

Sally: “The conjunction is have Antoine, as in I’d have you know I’m drunker than a skunk on some bad bald-skin swill.” *Points at him with her toe* “And no. I’m going to do it right after I do someo…I mean something else real quick. I am completely fine!” *Lifts her legs and arms straight up in the air, straining...*

 

Sonic: “You can’t get up can you?”

 

Sally: “Nope...” *Frowns*”Yeah, boys…there’s something wrong. I’m not quite myself am I? ” *Sounds like herself for one second*  “Surreal, guys I need to be carefilled. I could do something stupid.”

 

Antoine: “Indeed….” *Glowers at Sonic*  “Elle a raison à ce sujet.”

 

Sally: “You wish Antoine. If it was the other way around, well: “Je serais absent une robe, Monsieur Chevaleresque.”

 

Antoine: “I’d ne-“

 

Sally (non-chalantly): “Oh, yeah you would. You naughty, carnivore.”

 

Sonic: “You still want me to get down there with you don’t you.” *Tugs at his collar a bit*.

 

Sally: “Yep…that can’t be helped.  Please, blame it on whatever.” *Scratchs at dress* “Man I hate this thing!”

 

Sonic: “Yeah, I never thought I’d say this, but I miss the hard-to-get and prudey Sally.”

 

Sally: “Spft…yeah right.” *Makes snow angles in the carpet* “This carpet feels so nice. You should try some.”

 

Antoine: “Focus you two!” *Snaps his fingers* “Sonic.” *Straightens his sword bandolier* “You’re going to have to do it.”

 

Sally: “Oh gosh no!” *Waves her hand in a negatory fashion.* “I just drunk half a bottle of crazy-juice, and I know better than that.” *Rolls up quickly and tried to lift herself up in a push up, just fall back down. “Oh Hashem help us…we are young, dumb, and…and…”

 

Antoine:  “Intoxiqué…”

 

Sally *Lifts up hand*: “Exactamundo, Antoine.”  *Grabs at thin air around her bare ankle and places her fist to her ear* “Nicole! Tell me how to fix everything!”

  

Sonic: “She’s not here, Sal.  She’s –“

 

Sally (groans): *Flips an imaginary Nicole closed and stares seriously up at Sonic* “Oh I hate it when you’re right… You’re going to have to get in contact with her.“

 

 Sonic *Leans over*: “Why?”

 

Sally: “I memorized the speech. But Nicole has the notes. All you need to do is…” *Pulls a small ear bud from a hidden satchel in her nearby blue boot and tosses it up at him, hitting him in the snout.*

 

Sonic: “Ow…” *Drops in his hands*  

 

Sally: “Opps.” *Snorts with laughter.*

 

Sonic: “She can tell you what to say. She has the notes. Please…do this right Sonic.”

 

Sonic: “Sal, I’m not like you. Public speakin’ in front of a bunch of stuffy, slick-skinned weirdos in even stuffier suits isn’t my thing.”

 

 Sally:  “I know…” *Bumps the back of her head repeatedly against the carpet.* “I know. But you have to. I barely have any inhibition right now, let alone the ability to stand on my…” *Stares fondly at her feet* “You know I’ve never really gone anywhere without my boots.  Think I should do it more often?”

 

 Antoine: *Sits on a nearby couch face buried in his hands* “This couldn’t get any worse…”

 

 Sally: “Oh Sonic…if I knew I’d get your attention that way. I’d wear sandals, or just go barefoot sometimes. Not much tactical advantage in this, but it’s so comfortable.  Maybe I should ask Bunnie, to paint my –“

 

Sonic: *Notices the earbud hissing static* “Hm, wait a Sonic second Sal.” *Clips ear-bud to his ear* “This is the Blue blur speaking, will this be take out or delivery?”

 

Bunnie (V.O) :  “Sugar, we have a problem up here.”

 

Sally: “They are cute, you know…maybe, nah, I don’t like pink – never really did.”

 

Antoine (groaning in his hands): “Bien sûr, elle doit haïr ma couleur préférée.”

 

Bunnie:  “It’s Gamma, he…it’s here.”

 

Sonic: “You gotta be kiddin’ me. Is he –“

 

Bunnie (*sounds of lazer fire*):  “You bet. He’s looking for the Control Room.”

Sonic: “If he finds that...”

 

Spaz (v.o): “If he finds that you can count every Robian that has used Furlough’s Neural Net in 300 miles officially back on ole Robby ‘Nik’s payroll.” *Metal crashing* “Good news is that we disabled the surveillance system, bad news…”

 

Sally: “You know I always though Sonic was more of a leg man…it’s hard to tell really. *Crawls next to Antoine, smiling up at him* “He can’t keep his eyes off any part of me really. But when I mentioned the boots just now…that’s a bit telling.  Any other time I’d say all this gets on my nerves…but now. *Stares at Sonic*”Hey! You wanna know what I like about him?”

 

Antoine (growling): “It just got worse.”

 

Sonic: “There’s more bad news?”

 

Spaz: “We got an assassin on our hands, or at least somebody armed running amuck down there 

in the banquet hall.”

 

Bunnie: “I saw them spinkin’ somebody’s drink from under the table. Besides a pistol, all I saw was masked head and a gloved hand. I’d reckon it could be anyone. Mobian, overlander, you name it. Whatever you do, don’t drink…”

 

Sonic: “The wine…I know.”

 

Bunnie: “Oh my stars, Sonic, you didn’t! Please tell me you’re alright!”

 

Sonic (*sighs*): “I’m okay Bunnie, remember I don’t get poisoned easy.  No, they got Sal.”

 

Bunnie: “Oh no…no, no, no.”

 

Spaz: “Those bastards!” *Metal crash*

 

Sonic: “Calm down, you two. She’s fine. Well, mostly. Why an assassin didn’t just…”

 

Antoine: “Because I actually carry something for that.” *Pulls out a vial from his bandolier. “I’m prepared for any poison you can and can’t find here in Casino Zone.” *Shakes the vial* “Zhis stuff is so powerful, you could drink a barrel of sewage and your breath would smell like spearmint, it makes your insides squicky-clean.”

 

Sonic: “Perhaps they just want to embarrass us.”

 

Sally (*pulling herself on the couch*): “They succeeded.” *Falls on Antoine.*”Don’t even…”

 

 Sonic: “Why, though?”

 

 Sally: “Character assassination. Seeing me…well like this…during the first United Provincial Assembly, well that shows weakness.  It would be quick for a bunch a xenophobes, to place judgment on us Freedom Fighters. Half of them are looking for a good reason to not like us…baldy poopheads.” 

[Uncle Ben]

First part this is all i can think off

 

[TheRedStranger]

First part this is all i can think off

 

 

Antoine beat you to the punch. Oh mon. Is French for this.

 

That was just for you. Subtle, but it's there.

[TheRedStranger]

Nice!

How so? I am trying to gauge what people liked about it. IN depth opinions are deeply desired...and reciprocated.

[Uncle Ben]

i like how Sally is kinda under the "Beer Goggles" Effect

[RedAuthar]

I like how as the characters are older, their still growing.  They still haven't hit the grown up stage yet.  

[TheRedStranger]

I like how as the characters are older, their still growing.  They still haven't hit the grown up stage yet.  

 

Yeah, Mobians have an extended adolescence in EoT. Mobian lifespan is not like human lifespan. Though they reach puberty at the same age they don't fully mature untill 25. If you are married at about 22 that's considered rather young (like an 18 year old getting hitched). 25 is when you have full rights as an adult in goverment and certain life-choices. Though our FFer's are very mature for their age, they haven't seen a lot of the world besides Robotropolis and Knothole and there are a lot of surprises in store as they learn about the world they thought they knew discover new things about themselves.

[RedAuthar]

Like Sally having no tolerance for Alcohol. 

[TheRedStranger]

 

 

Nice!

How so? I am trying to gauge what people liked about it. IN depth opinions are deeply desired...and reciprocated.

 

 

Your character development is coming along quite nicely; you're keeping with their SatAM personalities intact, but at the same time adding to them quite well to fit your story. Your use of situational comedy is quite good in this section with basically taking someone who is normally straight-laced show unbecoming social faux pas and thus putting that character's friends in a tough spot.

The only issue I see is that I'd like to see more that is going on outside this scene in the overall plot.

 

 

 Be patient.  You will see more soon. The story is broken up in different perspectives all trying to accomplish two intertwined goals figure out what this new Fulough Incorporated is secretly up to and to gain the sympathy of multiple disparate factions for future diplomatic leverage. Some certain villan throws a wrench in the gears of their plan, and they got to keep everything in order and not get cuaght with their hand in Furlough's cookie jar, who is ironically sponsering the event. Sonic is left holding the ball diplomacy wise, being the fabled Hero of Mobius he has a lot of eyes starting critically at him while everyone sneaking upstairs is fighting a death machine while trying to be sneaky, without the Blue Blur to back them up.

 

 How did you guys like Antoine's new found ranger skills? I wanted give him more than just the Archie-arc, cowardly doofus to swordmen. This version of Antoine has a lot more under his belt yet is twice as quirky. Very much a Jakie-Chan type of quirky comic fighter that still is very jumpy and protective. Poor guy is going to have to sniff out the potential assassin/sabotuer while Sonic gives the speech.

Like Sally having no tolerance for Alcohol. 

 

You think that is bad...you should see Vector.

[Captain Sorzo]

 Very much a Jakie-Chan type of quirky comic fighter that still is very jumpy and protective.

 

 

Uncle Chuck: *Smacks Antoine across the head* One more thing!